• TotallynotJessica@lemmy.blahaj.zoneM
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    3 days ago

    there’s a lot of good things about her characterization and the story can be really sweet at times…

    but god damn is the author creepy as shit! i would be enjoying a really cute scene only to have the male gaze get turned up to 11, reminding me the author has a history in loli hentai. Unlike the nier creator, it feels a lot less harmless when the oc is so clearly an immature kid.

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      3 days ago

      I have similar thoughts on Made in Abyss. Holy fuck is it good horror and a compelling story, but jesus the author is creepy towards little kids. And I’ve only watched the anime, which is probably very toned down on that front compared to the manga

      • 野麦さん@lemmy.dbzer0.com
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        3 days ago

        I think saying “yo this is actually good but the author is a pedo” is basically the same as admiring Mein Kampf while arguing the death of the author is important

        Basically what I mean is Made in Abyss IS BAD and I don’t like people heaping praise on it. The author is a pedophile. The story, characters, and plenty of scenes in it are softcore (or maybe not even softcore, I haven’t read it for obvious reasons) child porn. Sadistic child porn too. I can poke a million holes in Made in Abyss, but what’s the point?

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                13 hours ago

                The best advice I have is to practice writing proper prose in a stream of consciousness style. Try to not edit other than with the delete button on what you just wrote. At least, that’s how I got to my kind of eloquence.

                You know how people advise you to read you writing aloud to hear how it sounds? Phrasing, readability, etc. I think the skill I have that helps the most is being able to write cogent and speakable language from a stream of consciousness. Try typing exactly how you speak, errors, accents and local expressions all included. It’s a skill, yeah. Turning your vocalized speech into internal speech into written language; you get to the point where you can produce written language that sounds like someone speaking naturally.

                As for flow and getting a point across? Studying prose helps. Simple things like “shorter sentences make a punchier phrase” or whatever help. Having a written style helps also. I’m not exactly sure if any of this helps, but thank you for complimenting my eloquence. I’ve never felt particularly eloquent - but I do speak my mind and only my mind. Popular opinion and groupthink are for unoriginal people. Sure, you can hold a popular opinion, but you’ve also got to have a reason for it that you can express.

        • Melmi@lemmy.blahaj.zone
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          3 days ago

          Years ago my ex was trying to get me into anime and they decided to show me Made in Abyss and it put me off anime for years

        • Zorsith@lemmy.blahaj.zone
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          3 days ago

          Agreed. I very much have no intention of ever reading the manga or supporting anything to do with it for those reasons. The anime i watched sort of out of morbid curiosity.