Hey Bookworms! So… I’ve sorta been writing my own LN. It’s an isekai with some LitRPG elements without turning into spreadsheet porn.
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1EIrE-NY4ivUcPvoLtGHfuVZrRXARKiHx/view?usp=sharing
I’m maybe 1/5th of the way done with book one but I’m starting to get those nagging brainworms.
You know, like, “Ugh, what am I even doing. Is anyone even going to enjoy this?”
My IRL friends don’t read much and even if they do they don’t read isekai and don’t understand the tropes (eg. “Hey, why isn’t this guy freaking out 24/7 about being in another world?”)
So… plz read my book and tell me what you think? uwu
Title is WIP. Most everything else is not, although I might tweak a few things later. And yes, this book cover is AI… I absolutely will NOT use AI for the final version but I wanted something to keep my mind focused.
You know, like, “Ugh, what am I even doing. Is anyone even going to enjoy this?”
YES! It’s off to a great start. As an overworked office person I relate to the MC. In the scope of a JP novel the MC is from a black company so that fits the standard rubric as well.
Title is WIP.
Title seems fine to me. I’m used to the far too literal JP novel titles so this is a nice change. We haven’t hit the “problems” yet to see where it fits.
I’m starting to get those nagging brainworms.
Thoughts/Advice from a amateur writer. I used to write stories for fun over a decade ago. I was even tempted to start writing and posting to Amazon before the boom really hit. I might’ve made it big before the market got saturated after COVID and even worse now after AI slop is everywhere. My focus was fantasy and supernatural writing.
I have a few thoughts on this.
Are you writing a Webnovel, LightNovel or a Novel/Book?
It looks like you’re writing a LN first instead of a WN. Writing a book/novel is quite different from writing a WN.
I define a Webnovel as a story written chapter by chapter and released as such. This can be seen as a sort of first draft of a novel in my eyes. A LightNovel is a polished webnovel released as a volume. Edited to it’s final form. Things can get added or removed at this point. Plot points can be fixed. Writing quality can be adjusted.
A Novel or Book is written as such from beginning to end and released all at once.It seems to be you’re aiming to write a LightNovel/Novel from the beginning. This isn’t a bad thing in any way, but I’d recommend shifting your perspective to writing a web novel. This isn’t the final form of the story. You’re mainly getting your ideas down and fleshing out the parts that feel fit.
If/when you get writers block (we all do) I’d recommend using the corkboard to flesh out plot points and events you want to happen and arrange them in order. This can give you a “to do list” of things to write out. If you get stuck writing out a scene just work on a different one.
I’ll post my thoughts on the story when I have time at a computer again. I’d like to reread the story so it’s fresh in my mind.
Writers block:
You can take a step back and work on the outline.
How’s the flow of the scenes?
What about far reaching goals or beats you want to get to?
What about laying in foreshadowing for future events?Got any fun ideas you want to throw in as a filler?
Ex: going to eat at a tavern, shopping for gear, training magic, a chat on character background to flesh things out (Fel or Mr. Evil). The list goes on. Hell. Make a list of ideas for filler. Write them out and put them no where. It’s good just to keep your fingers moving when you get motivated. You can throw them in where it fits later or even an after story.
I have read all 64 pages, and actually laughed out loud. After the first page that’s quite an achievement.
For anyone coming after me: just read the last chapter. It’s actually decent.
This “novel” is excellent exihibit of how humans can improve in their skill. From worst writing I have ever read to better than some published novels I had unpleastness of reading. Keep going as you will go places. Your skill has improved so much that it actually is a shame how bad the chapter 0 is.
In your place I would probably start over, and take a look how to structure a plot with twists and turns. Come up with a hook and first sentence of a book. As they say, that is most important sentence.
I love how sassy the catgirl is.
First, omg, thank you for reading the whole thing. And also for your honest critique.
From worst writing I have ever read to better than some published novels I had unpleastness of reading. Keep going as you will go places. Your skill has improved so much that it actually is a shame how bad the chapter 0 is.
Yes! Thank you. I feel like a lot of people are just “this is good” because they don’t want to be offensive. Honestly, your harsh criticism of the earlier chapters is just what I was looking for. It makes the later praise seem earned instead of just platitudes.
Plus, it gets my head out of my ass a bit and gives me a different perspective. If you feel the later chapters are better then they certainly are better. And if the early chapters are that bad, ouch but yes.
In your place I would probably start over, and take a look how to structure a plot with twists and turns. Come up with a hook and first sentence of a book. As they say, that is most important sentence.
This is actually great advice. And I think I see what I’m doing wrong. I have twists IN MY HEAD. But I think I’m too focused on setting up a big reveal later that I’m falling flat early on. Like, I have pages and pages of worldbuilding notes now and you really only start see that stuff in the latest chapter.
So yeah, thank you so much. I’ll give this a hard look, go back, and figure out how to set up the story better.
As they say, that is most important sentence.
And mine is “The universe is a prankster.” which even I admit is a bit cringe.
Have you considered posting it to royalroad, scribblehub, or a similar site?
I have not. I just started writing and now I’m here. I do eventually want to put it out there but haven’t thought that far ahead yet.
Maybe it’s the wrong approach but I thought I’d get more written before I posted anywhere. Plus so far I’ve been going back and making changes to earlier chapters so I’m not sure how that works with sites like you mentioned.
At least on scribble hub you mostly edit spelling and grammar mistakes. Not major plot points.
I have seen a re-write of the whole book, and the old version marked as draft.
The appreciating comments will come on those platforms, so your motivation will be fuelled.
Neat! Sounds like I should definitely check those out.
